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Writing 2 : Feedback


For this post , I will be posting Bettina's feedback on my Journal .
She made quite a lot of helpful comments that i need to take note of.I am not going to specifically point out the areas which she corrected but i'm going give a brief summary of the places that i need tot be corrected.


For the journal entry ,I thought it was usually written in  first person which is why i wrote mine in that point of view and Bettina agreed .A constant mistake i make which bettina has pointed it on various occasion is that my punctuations are usually improperly placed which could potentially confuse the reader.I am still trying t work on that as well. Also, there were some extra things i wanted to say but i knew it would be hard to so i put them in a bracket and in italics to show how i felt in the background of that specific scenario. My word choices was something i was already concerned about and when bettina pointed out my use of some words and grammatical structure can be better, i felt better because that way it'll help me be more conscious of it.I made sure to share my feelings in every entry which bettina found to be " engaging to read".
This was majority of the areas of my journal that i was both corrected and commended on and i found this very helpful. I have nothing to reflect on because i was already aware of the errors she pointed out and i am currently trying to work on them.

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